As you might have noticed, I added a new tab called Terra Fae where I pasted every excerpt of my novel that I had posted on my other blog throughout this year's NaNo. The excerpts are now deleted on my French blog and will eventually get deleted here as well but for now, I wanted to keep the adventure alive! ^_^
I've come to realize that I love to write for the readers... This is something I have loved to do during NaNo: writing all day long and posting an excerpt of the day's work on my blog. So I would like to keep on doing that whenever I'm proud enough of a scene! ^_^
I hope no one will mind...
I've come to realize that I love to write for the readers... This is something I have loved to do during NaNo: writing all day long and posting an excerpt of the day's work on my blog. So I would like to keep on doing that whenever I'm proud enough of a scene! ^_^
I hope no one will mind...
So, to keep with the word count: today, I have written 2 420 words even though I was off to a very sluggish start! (I had not written in three days so my brain was all bent out of shape! hihi) I'm now at a total of 52 820 words! Woohoo!! ^_^
And I've just introduced one of my favorite characters: Eva. :) (Warning: Ulie's gonna have a big onset of jealousy! Poor girl... I'm so mean with her!)
And I've just introduced one of my favorite characters: Eva. :) (Warning: Ulie's gonna have a big onset of jealousy! Poor girl... I'm so mean with her!)
I wanted to share Eva's arrival with you guys, if I may... So she'll be my excerpt for today! :D
Happy reading! ^_^
Happy reading! ^_^
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Novel excerpt
The two hours were over.
The group had made it to the door of District 6 but there was still no sign of
Xeres.
“You think something
happened?” asked Hane, visibly worried.
She was probably
referring to some problem during the heist at the mayor’s mansion, but Ulie
totally heard a different question: were they gone some place and… doing
something else?
She shook her head. “Come
on, girl,” she scolded herself. “It’s like you’re obsessed with… physical…stuff lately. What’s going on with you?!”
Quinton replied to Hane
but Ulie was so deep into her thoughts that she did not hear him. Soon after,
laughter came to their ears.
The group turned around
to find Xeres casually strolling down the street with a woman. Seeing the gang
ahead, he waved a leather pouch in the air as a sign of victory: they had the
document. But Ulie barely noticed... Her stomach spun on itself and landed back
in its place at the sight of them approaching: the woman had her arm locked
into Xeres’s.
And she was real pretty,
too.
“We’ve got it!” said the
town crier triumphantly as they reached the four others.
“Hi,” said the woman to
Ulie, holding out her free hand, not letting go of Xeres’s arm. “I’m Eva. I don’t
think we’ve met before…”
Ulie fought back tears;
now that they were standing side by side, she could see she was no match
against this woman. It was probably obvious to all! So obvious, in fact, that
it was physically painful. She felt too young, too short, too average, too
inexperienced, too useless, too… inadequate. And she hated that woman for all
those unwelcomed feelings.
But most of all, she
hated her for Xeres’s wide smile stamped on his face.
Seeing as Ulie was not
replying, Hane chimed in: “That’s Ulie, our newest friend. She’s a little shy,”
she explained.
“Oh! Well, no need to be
shy with me,” said Eva. “I’m really an easy-going kinda person.”
She had close to a full
head higher than the teenager and a slender, top shape build. Her shirt, that
looked like it had been ripped off right under her perfectly proportioned-bust,
displayed a flat belly gracefully showing abdominal muscles. She had short
black hair that surrounded her head like a dark, wild fire and she had pale
blue eyes that seemed to sparkle even in the night. And to make matters worse,
she had this amazing smile that illuminated her whole face.
Ulie despised her, right
from the start!
“So!” chimed in Xeres. “Let’s
have a look at this at the hideout,”
he said, designating the document.
“We can’t,” informed Krek
while the rest of the gang looked at the ground with sadness.
“Why not?”
“Something happened there…
We can’t go anymore, it’s too dangerous.”
“Oh great!” Xeres
exclaimed, sarcastically. “We can’t go to the hideout, we can go to the
Shelter, what’s left?”
“Well… the Guild’s
nearby,” suggested Eva.
Xeres looked at her with
surprise. “That’s true,” he said. “I hadn’t even thought of that… You’re so
smart! What would I do without you?” he teased.
She giggled.
And Ulie clenched her
jaws: oh how she loathed her!
Great job with updating your word count! That is a beautiful new chunk of shiny numbers. It's also exciting that you'll keep posting excerpts as well, because no matter how I look at it, the story keeps the tension up. It keeps building as more secrets and characters are added. The immediate jealousy of Ulie rings so true to me, also rembering what it's like to be a young teenager in love. And at the same time, Eva doesn't sound like a jerk. In fact if she's hanging out with Xerxes, she has to be a bad-ass, right?
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for your comment! ^_^ Always make me wanna write more! hihi
DeleteI love how you make my characters sound like they're real people! ^_^
Ah! The jealousy... An old friend of mine... Still butts in once in a while :P
And yep, Eva's a badass! Wait till you 'see' her fight! :D (Thought of this new scene in the bus and I can't wait to write it down! Oh well... tomorrow! :) )
Oh, I definitely agree with you about writing for readers! Feedback (especially good feeback) is super addictive! I enjoyed your excerpt a lot, although I think I need to go back and read past ones to catch up! Loves your names, very unique :D
ReplyDeleteHI! :D
DeleteThanks for visiting again!! :D
I love feedback! ANY feedback as long as it's honest! You can totally tell me that you don't like a character or you think a part is predictable or boring, I won't get mad as long as it's not just meant to be mean :P
If it's true, I'll even consider it and fix my story!!
Aaaaaw gee! Thanks for your sweet comment about my excerpt! ^_^ It was not one of my best ones, but it was an important one as Eva comes in.... But I think she gets more interesting in the scene following this one... Anyway! ^_^
Aaw thanks! I love the names too: I'm a sucker for Final Fantasy and, well, quite a few manga which are mostly my inspiration for names! ^_^
Thanks so much for stopping by!! Hope to see you around again! :D